my problem is you sound more like clone of someone else, like i said find your own style , be real, be angry.

I will do that. It has become clearer, what I must do. I am working on a Mario Kart review. By the way, my Smash Bros. review is currently uploading... This is the third review I've ever made, so hey, it's better than some jibberish you can't understand, with a crooked camera, recording a T.V. The second one I've ever made is the Smash Bros. one, that's currently uploading. I should have uploaded it first, but I held it back to do some touch ups, and I wanted to upload the Kirby one first, because it's far shorter, and I just wanted to get it out of the way. Remember, these first reviews are nothing but experiments. That's all they are.

Also, I noticed the talking is far too slow, and some parts, need further spacing. Hey, at least I know what's wrong with it, and that's the first step of improvement, and at least I'm trying. All first reviews, usually suck, anyway.

your hate against Adeleine and your deads in the game.

Who's Adeleine? Oh, that green guy? I really don't like him. That's just my opinion. I mean, it doesn't need to be in the video, if that's what your saying. But I think he just doesn't fit in, along with the other characters. Maybe it's because I grew up with Kirby's Dreamland, I don't know.

It kinda sounds like an infomercial,  like those guys with one tone, that yell everything (OXY commercials).

Anyways make it sound more smooth, you dont have to yell at the camera.

Overall i liked it, iv never played the game befor, good info on it.

You should also try becoming an hero.

What's that supposed to mean?

This:

http://www.encyclopediadramatica.com/An_Hero