Scifi fans, can you give an opinion about this prologue? is it too long/ grammar sucks / lame/ is it fun to read / confusing ...etc

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Richard_Feynman said:

Dr.Henry_Killinger said:
How did I miss this, Tagged.

I would not mind a thread similar to this one with the backstory of your sci fi game.

seconded, but he said he want to keep it a secret for now.