Scifi fans, can you give an opinion about this prologue? is it too long/ grammar sucks / lame/ is it fun to read / confusing ...etc

[PullusPardus]

NiKKoM said:

PullusPardus said:

No response, its so bad no one bothers =[

i got distracted by a wesslewoggle thread when I read.. 1/3 of it.. will get back to it

Yay!