Scifi fans, can you give an opinion about this prologue? is it too long/ grammar sucks / lame/ is it fun to read / confusing ...etc

[PullusPardus]

The name of the prologue and one of the characters is obviously taken from this song

  

and the "Scavenger" lady at the end is inspired by this, though it was coincidental when I first wrote it then decided to add her in with the "supply and demand" thing, I was originally going to have one person only like Repo The Genetic Opera, but thought more than one is better.