Re-evaluating Chinatown Wars' "failure"

[Gilgamesh]

izaaz101 said:

Gilgamesh said:

noname2200 said:

The "W" in "why" should be capitalized, and that clause is a rhetorical sentence, so it needs a question mark. Additionally, it becomes a run-on sentence. "140k first week" is acceptable, but only just: please make it "140k in first week sales" to clarify what is the subject of the sentence. Additionally, there should not be an apostrophe in "consumers," as that is the possessive form.

And "you happy now" is a fragment.

Edit: And "exceptable" is not a word.

Your getting way to complicated, everything is fine. :)

I'll add a couple more. "Your" should be you're and "to" should be too.

 

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