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Oh man you guys have some good ones.
I better start working.

I think I will make one with the nuclear launch detected thing.

I'm going to check out the zerg chimney.

The science vessel one sounds awesome

The firebat and medic one sounds cool but I don't know how the script would go.



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theprof00 said:
Here were some other ideas I was thinking about:

A tribute to dinosaur comics where the dinos are replaced by zergs.

A garfield tribute where something happens and it ends with "I hate mondays"

Maybe one with some redneck jokes.

One of somebody making a map.

Guy entering scene: watcha doin?
Guy at computer: After 28 hours of testing and 18 Horde flavored mountain dew gamer fuels, I have finally created the perfect hydralisk rancher map.

Guy: Oh really?
Guy at computer: Yeah, It's a perfectly symmetrical map for up to eight players, it has 100 upgrades, 15 evolutions, strategic chokepoints, easter eggs, clever jokes that pop up on screen. It is the ultimate user made map which will be downloaded thousands of times.

Guy: So it's all done then? Can I try it out?
Guy at computer: Not yet, I just have to give one of the players infinite resources.
Guy: Ah, you learn quickly padawan.
Guy at computer: I was once the apprentice, but now player 5 is the master.
Guy: Only a master of evil, douche.


I was also thinking about changing the llines in this comic to this:

first panel: Ghost exterminator changes to "EX-TERMINATOR"
second panel:
Marine 1: Ex-Terminator? Are yo supposed to be from the skynet division?
Marine 2: Nice swimsuit, at least you don't look like a splinter cell rip off anymore.
Ghost: You stim-junkies, I'm about to overload my aggression inhibitors.

third panel:
Marine 1: I think that latex suit is cutting off your circulation
Marine 2: Now he kinda looks like a Gray Fox rip-off
Ghost: That's it, you're calling down the thunder cough hack and.. now...cough

4th panel:
same, lots of breathing

5th panel:
Marine 1: And..we're going to reap the soft breeze?
Ghost: Whatever! You guys are just warhammer rip-offs anyway.
Marine 1: Lies! See, this is why they canceled starcraft ghost.
Marine 2: Ooh ! That ghost Nova is a Samus Aran rip-off, me-yow!



cool, but change the spliter cell part since people that undertand this joke know StarCraft come out before and is spliter cell that is a rip off



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theprof00 said:
Oh man you guys have some good ones.
I better start working.

I think I will make one with the nuclear launch detected thing.

I'm going to check out the zerg chimney.

The science vessel one sounds awesome

The firebat and medic one sounds cool but I don't know how the script would go.

you wont see it but it should be a butt hole



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Hey Listen!

https://archive.org/details/kohina_radio_music_collection

TruckOSaurus said:
I'm a Terran Starcraft player and while I rarely tech up to Ghost, I think the unit is really cool. Nothing strikes fear into your opponent more than hearing "Nuclear launch detected".

As for your comic strip, I would have the marine and firebat make fun of/blow off the ghost, make the ghost leave. Then when he's gone, you have them say something like "Ghosts are so lame" and finish the strip with "Nuclear launch detect" and the marine and firebat saying "Ohh shit!"

This is good. You might also divide the firebat and marine - have one make fun of the Ghost while the other guy is like "Come on, Gary, don't be os harsh to the new guy." Ghost leaves in a huff, jerk turns to friend and says "You tell me one good reason to not tell that kid how lame he is."

NUCLEAR LAUNCH DETECTED

Either that's the punchline, or you can finish out with the non-jerk going "Screw you, Gary."

It's not great, but it is a joke.



I updated the comic up top, let me know what you think.

Here it is again for the sake of ease.



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Can you do 3 rows? It looks really cluttered.







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that last part will probably be changed to "sexy Samus Aran rip-off"



Yeah, I could change it to three rows, but not on this laptop. I'll have to wait til' I get home to do that.



hey guys I need some review now, I uploaded another dialogue revision and a new comic.

Lemme know what you think.



Quick thing for your last one : Starcraft has a maximum of 8 players not 16.



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