starcraft comic, need helpful critique

[radha]

theprof00 said:
Here were some other ideas I was thinking about:

A tribute to dinosaur comics where the dinos are replaced by zergs.

A garfield tribute where something happens and it ends with "I hate mondays"

Maybe one with some redneck jokes.

One of somebody making a map.

Guy entering scene: watcha doin?
Guy at computer: After 28 hours of testing and 18 Horde flavored mountain dew gamer fuels, I have finally created the perfect hydralisk rancher map.

Guy: Oh really?
Guy at computer: Yeah, It's a perfectly symmetrical map for up to eight players, it has 100 upgrades, 15 evolutions, strategic chokepoints, easter eggs, clever jokes that pop up on screen. It is the ultimate user made map which will be downloaded thousands of times.

Guy: So it's all done then? Can I try it out?
Guy at computer: Not yet, I just have to give one of the players infinite resources.
Guy: Ah, you learn quickly padawan.
Guy at computer: I was once the apprentice, but now player 5 is the master.
Guy: Only a master of evil, douche.


I was also thinking about changing the llines in this comic to this:

first panel: Ghost exterminator changes to "EX-TERMINATOR"
second panel:
Marine 1: Ex-Terminator? Are yo supposed to be from the skynet division?
Marine 2: Nice swimsuit, at least you don't look like a splinter cell rip off anymore.
Ghost: You stim-junkies, I'm about to overload my aggression inhibitors.

third panel:
Marine 1: I think that latex suit is cutting off your circulation
Marine 2: Now he kinda looks like a Gray Fox rip-off
Ghost: That's it, you're calling down the thunder cough hack and.. now...cough

4th panel:
same, lots of breathing

5th panel:
Marine 1: And..we're going to reap the soft breeze?
Ghost: Whatever! You guys are just warhammer rip-offs anyway.
Marine 1: Lies! See, this is why they canceled starcraft ghost.
Marine 2: Ooh ! That ghost Nova is a Samus Aran rip-off, me-yow!

cool, but change the spliter cell part since people that undertand this joke know StarCraft come out before and is spliter cell that is a rip off