waay too long. you made your entire point in the first pic of the first panel. The next 3 parts just repeated yourself another 3 times which is why you come off preachy instead of funny.
waay too long. you made your entire point in the first pic of the first panel. The next 3 parts just repeated yourself another 3 times which is why you come off preachy instead of funny.
DixieKong said:
Thanks guiduc. I try to illustrate my views with a bit of light humour, but there are some who just take these comics the wrong way. I've said many times that I don't mean any offence. I make these to address the annoyances I have with the game industry and the negativeness towards Nintendo. However, I may make Nintendo related comics that don't deal with game industry issues someday. |
Whatever you do, when someone takes the time to do something and shows us his/her product, I'm just very grateful he/she did, it's always fun in a day to laugh a little.
| twesterm said: The art is quite good but as others have said you need to get better at just getting to the point and being done with it. If you insist on having really long drawn out comics, look up subtlety. With a comic as long as yours you might not want to pound people over the head with the point in the first panel. |
Well, compared to my previous two, this comic is quite short. I will try to improve, but sometimes I can't help but just cram in a lot of thoughts. I sort of make these like short stories more than comics I guess.
DixieKong said:
Well, compared to my previous two, this comic is quite short. I will try to improve, but sometimes I can't help but just cram in a lot of thoughts. I sort of make these like short stories more than comics I guess. |
not to be a critic, but you could focus more on comedy, like the patcher one
instead of "testing the vitality sensor", why not "testing the secondary effects? or dangers? just for the lulz
There's "We've we have" for Mario's speech in second last box.
DixieKong said:
Well, compared to my previous two, this comic is quite short. I will try to improve, but sometimes I can't help but just cram in a lot of thoughts. I sort of make these like short stories more than comics I guess. |
Yeah, noticed this one was shorter compared to your Pachter one (must have missed the other one) and it's better for it, but it's still pretty long. Someone mentioned this is almost like a political cartoon and that's a good point. Those are just about always a single panel and if you're going that route, you should do the same.
You completely made your point in the first panel and then you just hammered it in our heads in the following two. Having the image of the guy with lazy developer on his chart, Mario, and a brief dialogue would go a lot further than the entire comic.
As for the point of the comic, we all love to talk about how horrible shovelware and cash-ins are but they do actually have their place. Take my sister for example, she has three young kids and three DS's in her house. That means she needs to be able to have her kids entertained with all three of those DS's at all times (we could maker the argument she doesn't need three, but that's another story).
Anyways, she could buy three cashin/shovelware games at $10 a piece or a single quality game for $30. No matter what the quality of the game, a 4-6 year old is going to enjoy it just the same. It doesn't matter if it's Mario doing sublime platforming or Dora barely fumbling across the screen, they don't care. They only care they're doing something, not-so-much about the quality. Furthermore, the cash-in and the quality game will last the kids the same amount of time!
Case-in-point-- my five year old nephew has this one *terrible* game (can't remember the name, it's some terrible movie game) on his DS that he loves infinitely more than New Super Mario Bros. New Super Mario Bros is better in every way yet he still likes that crappy cheap game better.
So if you're the parent, what do you choose? Buy three cheap cash-in games for about $30 or three quality games for $90 keeping in mind the kids will enjoy either game just as much as the other?
I'm not saying people old enough to know if they're playing crap should buy those games, I'm just saying they very much have their place and are very much needed.
::rereads my post::
Man, talking about needing editing and being more concise...
I would consider this comic as the most superior of the three! The various puns never grow old, as well as the interactions between Dr. Mario, Dr. Luigi, and the "Lazy Developer! DixieKong, this comic benefited from its short length.
| kitler53 said: waay too long. you made your entire point in the first pic of the first panel. The next 3 parts just repeated yourself another 3 times which is why you come off preachy instead of funny. |
well in the same sense it coudl be part of the joke. I mean we have been saying year after year to make good games for the Wii and yet it doesn't happen.
But haven't posted in your comics yet, have read 3 of them now, not sure how many you made but like them all so far. Nice and funny. i don't mind the long read, but understand what others say about short and to the point. Ha kind of makes it a "casual" comic, lol. Guess their not hardcore comic readers like me.
Keep up the good work though, and to all those bitchers and whiners over them being pro-nintendo, look at the forum this is in.