I'm writing a book. Anyone want to read what I have?

[VitroBahllee]

think-man said:

VitroBahllee said:

I know. If he wants to establish that the main character is so powerful early on, he has to earn it. Telling us how awesome he is in unreadable sentences is just not going to work. Especially for a first page, where people are going to give up if they don't like what they see. Notice he asks for advice, but then argues with anyone who tells him what's not working. He doesn't want advice, he wants adulation: the same way he doesn't want to learn to write well, he wants to be praised for having written a book. There's a million (or more) people like this with half a bad book after seven years of writing and they all want us to tell them their unreadable, convoluted sentences are "special." If he really wanted to write, he'd take my two posts here as the biggest help to his cause anyone has given him, but he'll probably report me instead.

You haven't been reported, but don't talk such nonsence. Don't go making assumptions about the OP, if you have something to say then do so in a less hostile way. 

Okay. I'm a published author who has sold thousands of books. Unfortunately, based on what the OP has posted, he has a lot to learn. Additionally, based on his responses to criticism, he seems unlikely to learn it anytime soon. Hopefully someone will give you an intervention in an unmoderated environment that you'll actually listen to and you can begin down the path of learning how to create resonant work that will be as thrilling and delighting for your readers as it is for you to think about and write down. You obviously have some desire to tell a story, but you need to make sure the grand ideas in your head are being transmitted to your readers' imaginations, and this kind of prose does not do that. Hope this seems like a friendlier way of saying that.