VitroBahllee on 06 August 2017
Just reading the first two paragraphs of your explanation of what the book was like was deeply unpleasant. My advice is that your style is incredibly self-indulgent and you're relying on how much you enjoy producing this self-indulgent prose to mask how little actual story, character, setting, or any other actually enjoyable element of good writing your story has. But even you don't enjoy writing this crap TOO much, because by your own admission you are only rarely trying to add anything to your tale. This tells me that your main motivation is being able to tell people you have written a book because you want to seem impressive to them, and you couldn't care less about training yourself to become skilled at the art and craft of writing.
