Some of my thoughts on that review:
- You're not shouting, which is always a plus. I've seen far to many game reviewers screaming and shrieking their lungs out constantly for no apparent reason - and that gets really old really fast. And it hurts your ears.
- Like you said, you're overdoing the fecal references. If you want to underline the games problems with humorous hyperbole, you can do that without cursing or using words that describe human waste. Constant overuse of words like shit just makes you sound like an AVGN ripoff.
- The "When did we go from this... to this?" point was somewhat too long IMO, a shorter demonstration would have sufficed.
- I haven't played the game, so I can't sometimes tell whether the reviewer is just playing badly on purpose, or that the games controls really suck. That's why the controller-in-picture thing is a good idea IMO.
- The "Now loading" - segment was great. :P
- Don't bash anything without a reason. I know it's a chore to play and showcase all the games flaws, but even rants must back their points up with something. You did do a good job at this, but I'm mentioning it anyway.
- The ending came out of nowhere. Some sort of "in conclusion" - segment would be nice.
Overall, I'd give it a 7- / 10. At the moment, it's alright IMO, but can certainly use some improvement.
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