This was rather odd to read, some parts were funny/dark tho but I think you maybe have the wrong media for your humour? Have you ever considered making funny gaming news youtube videos? altho I know at this stage trying to make something of yourself on youtube is like pissing in an ocean of piss but still I think I would have enjoyed your post more had it come in the form of a youtube vid.
Good effort tho!
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