| JEMC said: @Porcupine_l : That first tool that gained consciouness, which was its name? @pi : A story in chapters, nice. But, will it continue? |
If you read carefully, it wasn't skynet :-p
@pi: I kinda like the premise of your story, but it is a bit all over the place right now. You should slow down a bit and give some more details and establish the charackters. It feels like you want to tell too much in too short sequences.
“It appeared that there had even been demonstrations to thank Big Brother for raising the chocolate ration to twenty grams a week. And only yesterday, he reflected, it had been announced that the ration was to be reduced to twenty grams a week. Was it possible that they could swallow that, after only twenty-four hours? Yes, they swallowed it.”
- George Orwell, ‘1984’
