| theprof00 said: Except he can't say either way whether he is right or not. Also, coming at the end of a sentence is not a requirement of a conclusion, especially a conclusion that is being further extrapolated. Stay mad. |
He doesn't implicitely say it, no. However, if you read what he says he gives you his conclusion.
"For Sony to show their hand with over 9 months for a respond from their competition is either brilliant or blunder." (rhetorical statement)
Implied answer to rhetorical statement:
"They allow their competition to make changes and tweeks to counter their stragety."
Blunder.
"They give their competition a chance to tighten their message to analize information from Sony reveal and better market their device."
Blunder
Now the conclusion...
"I am not looking at this situation like a gamer or consumer, I am looking at the situation like a business analyst developing my message with plenty of time to address weakness or strengths based on getting knowledge early. The race for Consumer money is not going to be decided in the short months between Sony and MS reveal. This will be a long battle just like it was last gen."
Why is what I pointed out the conclusion, the culmination of what is being said? Because this all goes back to the statements made in the original paragraph. That's how a conclusion works. You make statements in your thesis statement, you support it, then you draw a conclusion reinforcing your original statment.
"For Sony to show their hand with over 9 months for a respond from their competition is either brilliant or blunder." does not support the previous paragraph, therefore it is not a conclusion.
Also, you never introduce new material into a conclusion. I'm in no way suggesting that the OP made a good closing paragraph, just that you are incorrect in your assessment of the paragraph itself. The conclusion is, as I have said it is, the conclusion because it is supported by the thesis and support statements.
