Hi.

Want to ask you something.

This couple of  months i have tried too do a different sort of video review for videogames(for me not in general)

I call it the basic review, its a small 3-4min video where i dont go into to much detail since my english is pretty bad but understandable.

I uhmz Just tell the viewers the basics,

Is the story good yes or noo?

Graphics yes or noo?

Etc.

Now i would love to know your opinion, after watching one of my vids do you feel i  gave you that answer?

Would love to know it and if noo would love to know what i should improve on besides my english.

Thx a lot for your  help.

Let me start of by saying, that while you have a noticable accent, your english is very good and perfectly understandable.

I think it would do your videos some good if actually included some screens that detailed the portion of the rewiew you're about to tackle.

Like, for example, have a loading bar that has only the first part filled and have 'Graphics' written above it. Then for the next part you have two parts on the bar filled and the word 'Gameplay' above it.
I'd also leave a bit more of a pause going from on segment into the next before announcing the segment title. You often seemed barely finished with one Sentence before exclaiming the next title.

Also small nitpick, but if you're talking about the story, don't say you didn't play the story. If the story was bland and uninteresting say that. If the story was interesting, but nothing special say that, but don't skip a segment like that entirely.

I get that these are supposed to be small faster paced rewiews but I think a little more audio/visual structure like that would improve them and help show your personlity as a rewiever.

You sound a bit stiff, try to talk like you talk normally to a person.

Thx a lot!

i will implent that system for  a smoother transisition to the other subjects on the review.

yea i try to let it sound as normal as possible since i do read it of a paper..

will try harder thx a lot                                

older stle video for comparision.