| Khuutra said: One bit of constructive criticism I can offer is you should try to make all the speech bubbles shorter. Quicker, punchier lines that convey the same effect are funnier, as a rule. Most of these bubbles could be conveyed in one or two sentences if you really tried. |
Yes, I know my writing isn't perfect, but as I mentioned to another person, I had to give the developers a lot of dumb excuses to say. I'll keep trying to improve though.










