Wrote a poem about Iraq invasion...thoughts?

[hershel_layton]

haxxiy said:

Nice work, though a few lines are a bit too long. Syllable count throughout the poem was as low as 10 but about 13-15 on average, which is long already; but some went up to near 20, which lacks a tiny little bit in fluidity and comes closer to prose than poetry.

Though I know way more about the standards of poetry on romance languages rather than in English, so yeah, make of that as you will.

Thanks for the advice.

 

I'm probably gonna keep tweaking it. Gonna take a shot at a contest for it.