haxxiy on 06 February 2016
Nice work, though a few lines are a bit too long. Syllable count throughout the poem was as low as 10 but about 13-15 on average, which is long already; but some went up to near 20, which lacks a tiny little bit in fluidity and comes closer to prose than poetry.
Though I know way more about the standards of poetry on romance languages rather than in English, so yeah, make of that as you will.
