Rath on 09 May 2008
I only got a few paragraphs in but you have one huge problem. You're being nowhere near objective enough.
You swear to much and sound far too passionate, even just in the writing. To make a trustworthy sounding review it needs to sound like you aren't ripping on the game but rather that you are critiquing its flaws and positives.
Unless you want to be Yahtzee. In which case talk really fast and add more jokes.
