Scifi fans, can you give an opinion about this prologue? is it too long/ grammar sucks / lame/ is it fun to read / confusing ...etc

[Richard_Feynman]

PullusPardus said:

LemonSlice said:

Richard_Feynman said:

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Blunt and harsh, as it should be. You do talk yourself up too much, though.

I would to. If I was good at something. :P

^ That's humble I suppose.

Still, I've learnt (actually I'm still learning) that it's never a good idea - even if your just listing facts.