Scifi fans, can you give an opinion about this prologue? is it too long/ grammar sucks / lame/ is it fun to read / confusing ...etc

[Richard_Feynman]

PullusPardus said:

Richard_Feynman said:

Dr.Henry_Killinger said:
How did I miss this, Tagged.

I would not mind a thread similar to this one with the backstory of your sci fi game.

seconded, but he said he want to keep it a secret for now.

Didn't read that. There was a lot of dialogue in his thread and it's hard to follow so I skipped some of it.

It's so funny to me, all the sci fi everyone writes is the (so-called) space opera kind. Mine is set in present day with a single character that makes an invention and that's it. And it's not thaaaat big of an invention. The story doesn't focus on it at all - more about the political power struggle that ensues when the character attempts to use his new technology in the way he sees best.

In any case, the space opera genre is full of a lot of different stuff. Careful not to tread on anyone's toes!