Scifi fans, can you give an opinion about this prologue? is it too long/ grammar sucks / lame/ is it fun to read / confusing ...etc

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Mr Khan on 04 August 2014

Biggie for the grammar is that your tense has to remain constant. You switch between narrative past and present.

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