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The tail of the missing wombat
"That's how my grampa died" HAH! Witty one-lines there :)
My struggle
This is far more difficult for me, because you actually force me to think in a language that isn't mine to discuss literature. Nevertheless, nice cliffhanger. You threw the most interesting part and then said to be continued. Maybe you'll get to work at Telltale one day! I got a bit lost with the context, so I had to read it twice to get it correctly. Dunno if that was intentional.
Numbers are far more beautiful when written with letters and not with numerical scores :P
There's some repetitiveness, like saying Dr. Robitson over and over. It gives strenght, but it can also wear out the reader. Maybe try to say The Doc next time or something like that? It's not like there are more characters to get confused with!
Carry on writing ;)
P.S I'll get with the other texts later!
