| Adinnieken said:
As a current 4.0 student of English, who's instructor vowed she never gave A's out on drafts, but who routinely received A's on drafts, will say this.
"Xbox guy" is meaningless. It has no value. In order to offer weight to his opinion, he could have said "I've owned an Xbox (360) from the day it was released." "Xbox guy" doesn't qualify whether the person just liked what Microsoft did with the Xbox (360), liked the Xbox (360), or owned the console. I'm not debating he likes or doesn't like the Xbox. Just that the weight of the statement "Xbox guy" is weak.
His paragraph structure, more so than his sentence structure is horrible, however. Every sentence is it's own paragraph. Every fricken sentence. It'd have been better to break everything out into bullet points and leave it at that.
I've argued against the merits of the actual article elsewhere.
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The irony... That whole sentence sucks, by the way. Not that I can really judge you for this stuff on an internet forum. ;P
On topic, this article is really hard to comprehend. I have no idea what point he's trying to make. And what the hell is "PS4 levitates Sony" supposed to mean?
