Microsoft Destroys Xbox 720 as PS4 Levitates Sony

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VGKing said:

bananaking21 said:
what a piece of garbage (the article) the writer cant even construct a sentence properly.
"I’ve been an “Xbox guy” since the original one came out" no sir, you've been an idiot since the day you were born (just to clarify im not talking about somini, but the writer of the article)

What's wrong with that sentence?

As a current 4.0 student of English, who's instructor vowed she never gave A's out on drafts, but who routinely received A's on drafts, will say this.

"Xbox guy" is meaningless.  It has no value.  In order to offer weight to his opinion, he could have said "I've owned an Xbox (360) from the day it was released."  "Xbox guy" doesn't qualify whether the person just liked what Microsoft did with the Xbox (360), liked the Xbox (360), or owned the console.  I'm not debating he likes or doesn't like the Xbox.  Just that the weight of the statement "Xbox guy" is weak.

His paragraph structure, more so than his sentence structure is horrible, however.  Every sentence is it's own paragraph.  Every fricken sentence.  It'd have been better to break everything out into bullet points and leave it at that.

I've argued against the merits of the actual article elsewhere.