Mr Khan on 13 March 2010
I agree with ODC. What you've written really sounds like it would be better set as a Thesis statement, and not as an opener. In high school (which is where you're at, right) it is highly encouraged to write some wildly grandiose opening statements, high school teachers at least are impressed by that (and i quite wish i could still utilize that technique in college)
In regards to that statement, however, i would have written it thus;
"William Shakespeare's tragedy, Hamlet, is focused on the titular character's conflict with the ghost of his father. The way Hamlet relates to his mother, Ophelia, and Uncle Claudius is the basis for this conflict."
Monster Hunter: pissing me off since 2010.
