avinash habashi on 21 September 2009
| mike_intellivision said: More topic introduction, less citation in the opening paragraph. That beginning was rather dense. Tell me what you are going to tell me. Then start telling me. And conclude by telling me what you told me. (I. Introduction. II-VI. Body. VII. Conclusion). Also, unless Bruce D. Bartholow is on the faculty where you teach, you probably need to identify his institution (and even if he is, you should do so anyway). Mike from Morgantown |
I havent written an introduction yet. That paragraph you read is actually the second paragraph. The thesis statement is going to be the last sentence in my introduction, which I havent written yet. I am working on the third paragraph right now which has to do with single parent homes.
I also listed all that shit about Bartholow in the works cited page, I didn't think I would need to post that.
