Have you through your 4586 posts just been building up to this thread? I mean, look at your first post! It practically asked how to write this. http://www.vgchartz.com/forum/thread.php?id=28213
And yes, the tone is a bit too professinal... But using that word is a problem. The professional reviewers don't write in a professional way (read: what I consider to be a professional way). It's a bit more as if you're just stating the facts. I don't know if it's really a bad thing or not though.
http://www.vgchartz.com/games/userreviewdisp.php?id=261
That is VGChartz LONGEST review. And it's NOT Cute Kitten DS