numberwang on 06 August 2017
My intuition would be to include some character or world facts or happenings early on that show (don't tell) why the character or the setting is intense instead of just saying that everything is intense. Something tangible has to be there for the reader to grasp.
Reading this I was getting flashbacks from Cowboy Bebop (an older Spike Spiegel) - look how things are introduced, not by stating how Spike is as a character but having if flow naturally from the setting and action.
I haven't read your book but some will stumble at the first page.
