starcraft comic, need helpful critique

[theprof00]

So, blizzard is giving away beta keys to winners of starcraft themed comic strip submissions.

I need some constructive criticism of one I did today. Please no trolling, I need serious posts only.

 

Suggestions:

Add ghost heavy breathing

change wayyyy to way~~ or waaay or just way.

Fix the spelling mistake "on" to "one"

Possibly add another square in between the last two where nobody is talkign and the ghost is just breathing.

 

 

Updated with new dialogue and format.

 

Here's one I just finished

Here's another one, and no, I'm not too proud to resort to fart jokes.