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Not trying to be offensive but I would say you need to go take some writing courses, their may be a good story in their but the prose is way to over complicated and makes the reader work way to hard to understand. I have to write a lot of white papers as well as review a lot and one of things we always do is send everyone to writing lessons so they learn how too write for their audience not for themselves.