VitroBahllee said:
Okay. I'm a published author who has sold thousands of books. Unfortunately, based on what the OP has posted, he has a lot to learn. Additionally, based on his responses to criticism, he seems unlikely to learn it anytime soon. Hopefully someone will give you an intervention in an unmoderated environment that you'll actually listen to and you can begin down the path of learning how to create resonant work that will be as thrilling and delighting for your readers as it is for you to think about and write down. You obviously have some desire to tell a story, but you need to make sure the grand ideas in your head are being transmitted to your readers' imaginations, and this kind of prose does not do that. Hope this seems like a friendlier way of saying that. |
haha, no, I thank you. I really do want the help. It helps me to see things that I'm blinded to. Really, I'm in a thought chamber, myself and what I think of what I wrote so far. Reading genuine thoughts and criticism helps me in the proccess. And no, I'm not writing this just becuase I want to brag. I want my workk out there some day and this is a push in the right direction. Truly, I have the whole story in my head, I just can't get it to come out the way I think it should.
I notice you're an actual published author. Wow. I'd like to be your friend. Listen, I'm probably not as talented as you, and I bow to your accomplishments, but please understand I'm trying. If you have anything to say, or if you can give me a piece that you wrote, I'll buy it and see how I can get to a higher level. I understand there are people out there just to say they wrote a book, but I want to succeed. I would hope you read what I have and really give it to me. I have all the time in the world and I can try to sharpen myself in this effort.
